14 years ago
Mon Feb 08 2010, 06:28pm
Thank you both :) I am sorry i don't have any more on that story, I don't what i could add :-/ I mean I could give it a more depressing ending and have them, I don't know :|
But here it is and I have edited it a bit more so please do tell me what you think. Deb, I hope I have fixed up some tenses and the requested paragraph :)
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Leaving
It was the night Shinobu and I would leave to face whatever awaited us across in the other worlds. Tonight was the last night we would spend together. I wore a soft cream voile dress that hung off my shoulders and flared outwards at the waist, he wore darker colours. We walked along the cliff top, towards the setting sun, hardly speaking. We were both sad and were content to simply be together.
We stood shoulder to shoulder on the high cliff top on one side of a large cove, watching the sun set and the clouds change colour. The hills on the other side had turned misty purple and the ocean colours melded from blue into purple then pink and yellow as it moved to the point where the sun had sunk into the ocean.
As I watched the colours slowly changed and grew more intense, I thought back to when Shinobu and I had first met. I remembered it as though it was yesterday- we were seven. It was my first day at the new school, my family having just moved here.
“Akira, could you say something about your self to the class?†Mrs. Takashi asked me. Obediently I stood up, embarrassed and shy, and introduced myself. I was so scared. I said everything too fast gabbling out: “My name is Akira and I like to play games and have snowball fights and I want to be a winged watcher when I turn eighteen.†Everyone was laughing except one person and the teacher had to ask me to say it all again. I felt very ashamed and focused on the boy at the desk in the middle of the classroom who had not laughed. When morning break came Mrs. Takashi introduced me to Shinobu, and after that day we were best friends. We have come a long way since then.
I became aware, once again, of the sunset and Shinobu standing so still next to me. By this time the colours were tinted with more blue. “The sunset is beautiful, Shinobu†I say quietly
“Not as beautiful as you Akira.â€
Smiling I reply, “Remember at my ninth birthday dinner?â€
He was smiling now. “How couldn’t bring myself to tell you how beautiful you were? I tried several times and the words just caught in my throat.â€
“I was so puzzled, wondering what you were trying to say to me.â€
Thinking back I remembered how much had been unsaid between us. His family had soon moved to the city and I stayed behind rushing home anxiously after school to see if he had written to me. The next time we saw each other was during the summer holidays of our thirteenth year. He had convinced his parents to let him come down for a week and stay with a male friend. We went out for an afternoon together and that was the day, with much embarrassment, he told me how beautiful I was. It was another two years before we said we loved each other. Even with all the time separated from each other we still remained best friends – we would always write to each other about our joys and sorrows, my fights with friends and his struggles-both of us cherishing our dreams to become winged watchers even though it would mean a small chance of ever seeing each other again. There was no one who knew us better then we knew each other.
When he was almost sixteen his family moved back to care for a sick relative and we both rejoiced as we could then spend time together. We went to school together spending every afternoon doing homework together. These thoughts brought me back to the present.
“Shinobu, remember the night we said we loved each other?â€
“Yes I remember that†He put his arm around me and squeezed my shoulders. “And not much has changed since then either.â€
We both looked at the sky, darkening now with intense shades of plum and golden yellow. Turning around I saw the moon had risen, like a huge pearl, and hung low on the horizon. Shinobu turned and looked also. Both of us felt the words unspoken between us, the feeling that has no words to describe it of happiness, sadness, awe and a desire to hold on as well as release.
As we turned back he said, “I will need to leave soonâ€
I didn’t want to face the truth so I hugged him, put my arms around his neck and held onto him burying my face in the base of his neck. “I will miss you Shinobu but you will be forever in my heart.†I felt immeasurably sad.
Leaning his head against mine he whispered something in my ear I didn’t catch and as I tilted my head up to see his eyes and ask him what he said his eyes locked onto mine: in his eyes was the most intense look I had ever seen and all words died on my lips as his mouth closed over them. Into this last kiss I put everything; it was my best, my most passionate kiss. He held me tighter. We felt all the unspoken words with that kiss, conveying what neither of us had words for. He looked me in the eyes, those deep brown eyes that loose me n them, and he said with a passion, “And you in mine.â€
That was the last time we ever spoke to each other. We began to walk and as we walked two men materialized and then all of us faded into the gathering night. And as we were heading through the curtain of our world into another we separated, maybe never to see each other again.
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And my paragraphs are how the originally were now :)
Thanks Deb, that was really helpful :)
Well Shonkie, this was meant to be a stand alone piece of writing, I think it may turn into a full or at least a longer story :)
14 years ago
Tue Apr 06 2010, 06:42pm
Here are some poems I wrote on the 04/07/09 according to the date on the page :P
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Fathom me
Fathom me, my dear
For life itself is wrong.
Fathom me, my dear
For life itself is a lie.
Fathom me, my dear
For you are not who you say you are.
That was written through the eyes of A'shelm- a demon.
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And some poem I wrote- not sure why I was most likely angry at the time.
Darkness
Darkness be my firend.
Darkness be my companion.
Darkness follow me,
through misty realms.
Darkness chase me through the sunlight!
Darkness- lose me!
Take me!
Change me!
Hide me!
Darkness be my friend.
Darkness be my companion.
Darkness created the storm inside of me.
Darkness filled me with untold anger.
Darkness- So dark!
So cold
So black
So cruel
Darkness go away!
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General feedback on what you thought and if there could be any changes made would be greatly appreciated :)
Mystic Ward
14 years ago
Mystic Ward
Twentyfamilies Gypsy
I like Darkness. I feel like that some times so I can relate.
I agree Deb, I actually prefer dark to light... wonder what that says about me ~:|
I llike it DT! Both of them, especially the dark one. :P
I am glad you enjoyed them :)
14 years ago
Wed Mar 10 2010, 05:00pm
A gust of wind notifies the nine card players at the table that their leader has come back. They all pause and look up or around to see their leader, Belladonna. She stands on the door way, letting the ferocious wind blow her black, curly hair around her head in an eerie and powerful way. Her slight and elfish figure well displayed in her hunting leggings of moss green and her looser shirt of crystal blue. With her whip in hand she was formidable.
In way of greeting, with a coy look in her eyes, she says “Look what I have found.â€
The others at the table look at each other, who did she bring back a pet for this time? She never brings one back for herself, she only looks at them.
Belladonna cracks her whip and in walks a creature, almost tiger like and gorgeous until you saw the fear in his eyes and the lash marks across his back so fresher and other festered and raw. The group mumble among themselves. And one speaks up “Bella, what have you done to this poor creature. 5 days you have been away and then you come back in the middle of a storm…with this thing!â€
“I have done nothing to this creature except taken it as my own. I wrested it from the clutches of the other huntress who had him and made him my own. She whipped him and beat him and now all is fear inside of him.â€
Another woman spoke, “We never take in wounded creatures.â€
“I will care for him and when he is healed he will be better than them all, he is gorgeous, gentle and will come around soon.†She lays a hand on her head and says commandingly. “ If any of you lay a hand on him you will all pay†The others look down, they can never refuse their leader without serious retribution.
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I will go over it again tomorrow (I think) as it has some words in there that need fixing up.
Let me know what you think of it- does it make sense? or is is a bit...iffy and fluffy? :-/