complete
1
Im finding it hard to think
and im finding it hard to say
everything i wanted to tell you
everything thats happening today
2
I woke up this morning
and I felt oh so fine
but as soon as my confidence was crushed
I exploded in my own mind mine.
3
I cannot keep this up
and I cannot keep playing these games.
My mind is a mess and even though I protest
I still am subjected to shame.
4
I try all I can, though try as I might
nothing ever is as it seems.
My woefull sorrow is pulled into tomorrow
dragging along in my dreams.
5
Everything is a mess and everything is all lies,
the truth cancelled out from my mind.
i have objected to laughter, happiness and smiles
I have let go of the time I was kind.
4
So one last time I will sing my own song
one last time I will be joyous and not wrong.
One last time before I am subjected to defeat
perhaps I could find my missing pieces and become complete.
Shame
Your shame apon me
has put me down.
And as my wings grow
inside I will drown.
I know I shouldn't care
but I just can't stop to think
that the way you feel about me
is making me so sick.
I know I shouldn't feel this way
but I can't help the fact that I do.
I just want to be impressed
I just want to impress you.
And even though you hate
the way that I am.
I just can't stop doing this
to make you love me back.
I just want you to know
that I love you so
and even though you cease me to grow
I cannot let you go.
And so now your shame
that has lasted for so long.
Will be a mere memeory
because I will strive to be strong.
1
Been trying too hard to live
and so ive forgotten how to breathe.
Too many merories ive lost
too many loved ones ive pushed out the way.
2
Been searching too hard
that I've found i cannot find
The reasons i have lost all hope,
the reasons I am blind.
coda
And don't you think its special
when you feel you make it rain?
And dont you think you're lovely
when you are kissed again?
And dont you want to tell yourslef
that you are all the same.
Every little part of you
is a little more in frame.
3
Been looking for the wrong way out,
been looking for a clue.
To find a way to come back to you,
but I dont know what to do.
4
I try to open up my eyes
but every time i try.
I fall against my broken wings,
and so I'm left to cry.
coda
And don't you think its special
when you feel you make it rain?
And dont you think you're lovely
when you are kissed again?
And dont you want to tell yourslef
that you are all the same.
Every little part of you
is a little more in frame.
I just want one more
chance to start again.
Just one more clue
so that I can see.
If anyone
thinks that I will fail.
Then I'll just try another day
I'll just have another say....
coda
And don't you think its special
when you feel you make it rain?
And dont you think you're lovely
when you are kissed again?
And dont you want to tell yourslef
that you are all the same.
Every little part of you
is a little more in frame.
keep it going
keep your head up
keep it strong
and dont look down.
keep it together
keep it intact
and do not frown.
cause we're watching you
and we're telling you what to do
so dont look back
dont get lost down the track.
keep on going
even if you think you're done.
keep on trying
even when it all goes wrong.
keep it flowing
keep it going your way
and keep on saying only what you want to say
cause we're watching you
and we're telling you what to do
so dont look back
dont get lost down the track.
Even if you think that we are telling you
something thats not true.
Don't let it bother you cause you will see
how right we were for you
we done it all for you
keep on going
even if you think you're done.
keep on trying
even when it all goes wrong.
Just keep on going
keep on trying
if you give up now it will all go wrong
you're doing it all for you
Chain Of Hate
I await,
patiently as your erotic humour is devoured.
In this life, it seems
all that has been done to me
is all entwined in the worthless chain to get back at me.
Soon,
it seems I can let go.
Fighting passionly for my release has done me no good.
When will this everlasting pain cease?
When will I rest my head in peace?
All the hurt you fire at me is nothing now
the devil-spawn in me, as you told me,
will rage against you.
Though I'm sorry, I don't mean to hurt you.
I just wait,
anxiously in the dark corner of my mind.
It's tierd, it seems, of sending worthless messages to your mind
and being rejected.
So now,
carelessly as the snake
I'll repel against your rape
and devour you
in this everlasting chain of hate
I seem to have posessed.
kaylan ur poetry is always so full of emotion [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/smiley.gif" alt=":)" border="0"/> I was feeling the hate in that one for sure!
thankyou Ry! [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/smiley.gif" alt=":)" border="0"/> i really liked that one. It wans't really like my others but still i liked it baouve the rest!
Fallen
My fall has picked you up
my laughter has ceased your pain
my agony has brought your laughter
over and over again
My lust has brought on anger
my faults have destroyed the light
and so I wait drenched in pain
waiting for my chance of flight.
When will the world bring peace?
when will the world bring an end to my pain?
I do not feel like living anymore
this world of dammnation bringing my shame.
'WHAT SAY YOU?''
1
''WHAT SAY YOU?'', lost proffit,
working over your lines.
''WHAT SAY YOU?'', I ask,
wanting to read your mind.
2
''WHAT SAY YOU?'', I ask you,
determined to find the truth.
''WHAT SAY YOU?'', I ask you,
dwelling in your past youth.
---
I see you, working over your masterpiece.
I see you, dwelling in your nocturnal alley.
And I watch you, you sinner, it seems you are.
You liar, whom I do not desire
''WHAT SAY YOU?
'How do you know what is truth?''
---
3
''WHO NEEDS YOU?
'dear profit,'' is your response.
''YOU NEED NOT YOU!''
you tell me in weary wake.
4
''IT IS NOT YOU!''
You say, screaming for peace
''THERE IS NO TRUTH, NO WORDS OF REMORSE TO CEASE
EVERYTHING YOU HATE!''
---
I see you, working over your masterpiece.
I see you, dwelling in your nocturnal alley.
And I watch you, you sinner, it seems you are.
You liar, whom I do not desire
''WHAT SAY YOU?
'How do you know what is truth?''
---
Sirens Verdict
1
Repelling against your venom
seems to have done no good.
Selling out your hatred
seems to have reeled me in.
2
Once another person
I would have gladly objected to this role.
This infinitie devine you own just like mine
will take another toll.
3
Wandering endlessly through fileds of snow
I find a snake killed by a bow.
I untangle its body and shed its skin,
remembering the way I felt when this began.
4
Just a snake out of it's skin,
I was back then.
Frightened of what lay over the hills.
But now I strive to scare away those fears
that kept me insane for all of those years.
5
Now I look up and with my eyes I see
a lady with a violin calling out to me.
She wants to take me, though I wont give in.
I've mastered the skills of staying hidden.
6
Back to my fortress I go,
carrying with me the snake.
I leave behind its twisted skin
and forget about the time when this did begin.
umm, WOW! its no wonder you've won competitions! your poems are so lyrical. do you put them to music? you should if you don't. excellent work. i really love them!
wow
well thankyou MysteriKat! YAY!! more feedback *dances*
I like to rhyme with my words, though sometimes I do make them unrhyming.
I sometimes do put them to music with my band *mutters about dormantness of band* but then again I can't cause it would just ruin them cause only I know the music to the poem and if I just put any old music to it, even good, it still wouldn't feel *right*. Do you know what I mean?
yeah, i know what you mean about the music thing. i have thought about putting some of mine to music - the rhythm of some of them scream at me, begging to be heard - but although i'm a musician, i am a terrible composer! i have tried to write my own stuff before, but its not great, and its not easy - i guess my musical talents just don't lie that way [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/sad.gif" alt=":(" border="0"/>. i did give some of my poems to some very talented friends recently, and i think they are going to work on them! so thats exciting!
my friend (who i gave the poems to) is an amazing singer and songwriter - she actually just go through the Australian Idol round in Byron Bay, and gets to move to the next round, so thats great!
i've been trying to write more. sometimes 1 or 2 lines will just pop into my head, and a poem will grow from there. other times, words, descriptive words, will come to me, and something grows from that. at the moment, i am trying to write a 'saga' poem based around some fo the characters from Arthurian myth.
anyways, love your stuff! its fantastic! keep writing.
Thats the same with me. I cannot compose. I mean, I can get a tune in my head but then it disssapears before I can remember it proprly so i won't forget it.
I think you should give it a go. Who cares if its not terribly good, who cares if its terribly bad? At leats you will know that you tired and if you succeed then tahts all the better!
I can't even play a guitar - I can just sing. So I know what you mean about lacking in musical talents. But I am very happy that you sent ypur poems to people who can make a difference. Enter a poetry compertition! I am sure it will do you good and you will do good!
Really? I am so jelous of your frieind lol! Of course, I am too young for australian idol but I would love to be on it all the same.
I think that the more you write the more you improve. Sometimes you hear a word that you just like, and then instantly that word has formed a sentence, and then it;s turned into a verse, and then *snap* there it is, you've written a poem. I find it easy to browse through a thesaurus sometimes, not because im nerdy cause im am not nerdy at all, but just cause sometimes when you;re writing you find you're blank when you can't find the [i]right['i] word and if you've read or just even browsed a thesaurus it really helps.
Thankyou, I really appreciate your feedback. If you do write your sage, put it up or tell me and I'll read it. I'd love to read one from you cause you are talented!
disguise
1
Sit and sleep, sit and sleep
cause I've got a plan
to get out of here.
2
And when you wake, when you wake
i'll take hold of your hand,
emotions sincere.
chorus
Because even though rainbows crumble
and brigdes of stone arise.
There will always be a time for laughter
amist all of the cries.
Amidst your stupid disguise.
3
You see, i see. Oh yes I see
all of the lies hidden by faults
just waiting to cease.
4
And yes I see, yes I see
what you think of me
and I won't let this beat down on me.
chorus
Cause when you wake
and all of the rainbows crumble
and brigdes of stone arise.
I will allways be here for you
amist all of the lies
Spawned by your stupid disguise.
coda
You see, even though you've let me down
I'll still be hear, when you drown.
I'll pick you up,
I'll hold your hand,
I'll let you know.
that I understand....
chorus
And even though rainbows crumble
and brigdes of stone arise.
There will always be a time for laughter
amist all of the cries.
Because you let down your disguise.
ooohhh! i love that poem - disguise. that one and Siren's Verdict would have to be my favs of all your stuff i've read.
i really love the chorus in 'disguise' - it creates such a beautiful, metaphorical imagery. you have such a talent with words.
yeah, i think i swallowed a theasarus when i was younger - its weird though, the 'big' words don't come out in my everyday speech - only in my writing, which kind of makes sense. most people don't know what you are saying when you talk theasarus!
i've got this amazing dictionary - its got 100,000 words! sometimes i flick through it, looking for something that stands out, something with a real ryhthmical quality. i learnt a new word the other day - 'excandescence' (white heat of passion) and i really want to use it in a poem. i've been trying to craft a poem specifically around that word. haven't been successful yet...
Thankyou. Actually I diddn't like it very much [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/tongue.gif" alt=":P" border="0"/> I've been trying to write a very emotional poem for ages but all thsi stuff I write keeps getting in the way!
Thankyou so much. I didn't think I was that talented. I just wanted to make people understand that there is more to people than you know.
amist all of the lies
Spawned by your stupid disguise. This means that the more you pretend the more lies wil build and eventually overcome you.
And then at the end when I changed it to Because you let down your disguise, I want people to understand that when you pretend everything goes wrong, but when you are truthfull, and let down your disguise everything is true and makes you happy because you are not hiding anything.
lol. thats the same with me. When I write my books I use big words but when I just talk to my frinds I don't because most of my friends have no idea what I am saying [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/tongue.gif" alt=":P" border="0"/>
wow I so want that dictionary!! I'd love to own one of them to just browse through and pick up a few words to memorise!
Well don't worry, one day a word will come to your mind that fits your poem or whatever you are writing without you knowing it. And then when you read over the poem you will be surprised to see that you wrote it!
Lost
Graveyard memoirs are tangled up in my sorrow.
My suicide deepens and stabs my heart, calling beneath my shield I keep.
Calling, ''come, come dear child. Amidst the sorrow is wake and when you wake there is no fear''.
Though I cannot obey, I cannot stay. I need to learn to walk before I leap.
I feel I am out of touch, bewildered in thinking my dormant heart escapes my nightmares.
Though as I drop and wither from human to swallowed up creature I begin to think that nobody cares.
I felt the paper hearts, tattered at my funeral. And I breathed the sorrow exhailed at my burial.
But did you know I held your hand as you grieved for my loss?
I knew you had been my beloved then.
But now it is too late, I am being laid to rest.
I can not communicate, I am so scared, I cannot face this test.
I gave up everything for you, and now you leave me all alone.
I just want to forget this pain and follow you home.
Oooo I love that last one! Very thoughtful n stuff...noice [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/smiley.gif" alt=":)" border="0"/>
"My suicide deepens" - I found that a really powerful line [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/smiley.gif" alt=":)" border="0"/>
Well done!
thankyou Ry. I feel this poem is really an improvement!
I love "i just want to forget this pain and follow you home" too [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/smiley.gif" alt=":)" border="0"/> I'd havbe to say it's ur best one yet! [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/cheesy.gif" alt=":D" border="0"/>
wow thankyou so much. I am so happy now!!!!! *dances* lol
its the energizer bunny. it keeps going and going. i wrote something that i just couldn't stop, it would be about a 15 minute song and i had to chop it down. though in flashback i coul've gone pink floydey with it. DSOTM (dark side of the moon) is put together as one gian song.
you are awesome, keep it up
sorrow
My fingers caress your face.
Bitterly scratching the scars your sorrow left behind.
Carefully, I murmur into your hair,
whispering of love beyond all heart -
wrenching regret i cannot mend.
I fear all will be lost if I cannot mend your ache.
If i cannot cease your pain,
who will be left to weep of your loss?
For if you would die, my soul woul go with you.
And with it my love, I so deeply percieve.
My lips brush your face,
and your mouth feelss cool beneath my touch.
But I cannot let you leave me behind,
for all I love you ever so much.
The quiet rage
The quiet rages within me
I notice, how it howls and weeps with fear.
Why do they neglect me so?
What have I done to offend them?
Too many times I ask myself why
why, why, why?
As if it is the answer to all of my fears.
But still, there has to be an answer for that question.
It cuts me so deeply that I hurt like pain
has never been felt before.
I try to listen, for the answer may be calling my name,
so softly that I strain to hear.
But how can a deaf man listen if he is lame?
How can he follow the long if he lays in shame?
There is no answer, if they've chosen to neglect me so.
For all the pain I've felt doesn't measure to my sorrow.